how did you get that sailboat to float over her head like that? How did you bring the dreams of a young girl to life? How did you bring heaven down to earth? Why, with leading lines, of course! 10
Nice try, but too many things in there: where are my eyes supposed to go? To the boat? To the girl with her dog? To the trees on the sides? Eliminating some elements by cropping thighter would give more impact and emphasis to the subject.