Chipped hole in a glass window of an abandoned amusement park ride control shack. My daughter peeked through the opposite window at the same time that I shot this.
Imported into Lightroom, converted to black and white, cropped, exported to Photoshop, added a border, re-sized.
I know this is more of a street snapshot, and there are a few things I would have liked to try in a redo, but time has gotten away from me. It may have been nice to frame my daughter's face in the hole, I might have also wanted to lengthen the focal length a little to remove some of the distraction in the background. Further advice would be very welcome.
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Place: 15 out of 68 Avg (all users): 5.6754 Avg (commenters): 8.1000 Avg (participants): 5.0526 Avg (non-participants): 5.8301 Views since voting: 1180 Views during voting: 345 Votes: 191 Comments: 19 Favorites: 2 (view)
Sarah - thanks so much for the in depth critique! I appreciate the time you have spent on discussing my shot.
Concerning the interpretation of the parameters for the contest, I see what you mean as the last sentence does say: "Take a photograph of some chips". The part that I looked at though was just before that sentence: "Many things come as chips or can be chipped (potato chips, poker chips, stone chips, ice chips, chipped glass)". Anyway, I was not too worried by the comments concerning this, and I don't mind my score suffering. I am new, and don't expect to place too highly :))
I do want to learn though, and that means I appreciate your comments very much!
I am one of those border lovers! I feel that often a picture can have an element that blends in with the background, and having a border can make the image stand out on a webpage full of other clutter, but you are not the first to mention that my borders are too overpowering. I am going to have to rethink this.
Once again Sarah - thank you very much for your time and insightful comments!
I didn't vote in this challenge as the topic didn't particularly appeal to me, so this is the first time I have viewed this particular image.
I see you disagree with those folk who thought this didn't meet the challenge. Whilst I personally like the image very much indeed, I can also see where the others are coming from. The challenge description did actually say, take a photo of some chips. So, if one wanted to be very literal, this image could certainly be considered not to meet the challenge. I'm not saying I think it doesn't meet the challenge, but just suggesting why other, more literal minded folk, may think it doesn't. :)
There's a lot to like about this image, it certainly tells a story. I also agree with Brian, putting your daughter's face to the hole would have spoiled this image, at least for me. It would, of course, created a very different image, but to my mind one that would be a bit contrived. This is certainly a shot that works very well in B&W.
A couple of things I may have done differently in presenting the image for voting. I think I would have cropped it so there was slightly less of the pure black under the window showing. Whilst it is clear it adds some context, I think the composition would be stronger without. Also, I may consider leaving the border off. It's a very heavy border and although it in some way works I think a slightly more delicate frame may work better. (The whole border vs no border discussion could take days!) I personally like borders in most cases, but for me, less is more.
I think you were certainly hit by some doesn't meet challenge voters. Despite that, you achieved a very respectable score.
Overall, a very nice image and one I'd be very happy to have in my portfolio.
Framing her face to the hole would have -- I almost said ruined it. No, you might have gotten a good image doing that too, but you would have broken this image. As it is, the broken glass takes the shape and suggestion of an apparition looking back at your daughter. That said apparition seems to emanate from the child's figure (her imagination?) is even more striking.
I really appreciate all the comments! I am not sure where the doubt of the "chip" theme comes from, as the hole in the glass is clearly chipped, but I am still more grateful of you all taking the time to give me some insight! :)) I am also so glad that I didn't get a 1 lol! :))
There is alot going on here and most all of it good. The flow through the frame between the sill and the battens leading to the swirl of the glass break is really nice. Figuratively the weird fractal reflection in the edge of the broken glass, the face in teh opposite window and the reflection/ dark mass in that window keep the eye churning. top marks, my pick of the group.
Pretty cool. It's like a cartoon balloon of what she's thinking. Clever capture. I have to say this challenge has left me flat and I'm not going to vote and this is the only one I'll comment on. Thank you.
Great shot, i love the effect of looking through the window and the fact that the crack passes across the girls face, really special shot and it gets the max from me.
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