I find this to be a little creepy because the face looks so pasty. It is an interesting idea but it needs a lot of help in the execution. The straight on look is just too ordinary. Some interesting angle and more dramatic lighting would be much more effective.
generally, a good idea, if very common this challenge. i would have a liked a different pose (more blue looking, i guess) and the yellow in the skin is really distracting.
the expression on the face is distracting from the picture. it looks like there wasn't much thought put into the picture other than trying to make the eyes blue and the rest grayscale.
Good lighting, good focus. I think the shot would have been better if the face was positioned slightly off center. It looks a bit stark to me and too much "in your face". I think the shot could have been made more subtle without losing the intensity. Also, having the bottom of the chin and top of the forehead cut out gives an unusual look here. Perhaps changing the position to vertical instead of horizonatal would have improved this.
WOW, those are some very bright blue eyes! Not sure how you got them to stick out so much, and downplay everything else?! Nice job though... Good luck with it... PS are those blue contacts?