The image shows good action, near peak and has good colors. What would I do different? I'd go in real tight on the crop and remove the player entering into the right portion of the screen. The image is sharp enough and has excellent colors and could easily handle a much tighter crop I think. I can't show you exactly the crop as DPC will no longer let me grab it to show you. So this is just a screen print with a crop in paint. ignore white on the right. See how much stronger if the this crop is even with a loss of the limb?
This is like a painting. the guy cut-off in the corner is a slight distraction, but not enough to take away the story you are telling. What sharpness, what DOF. Bravo my friend!
honestly, you blew it with the crop. if you had cropped all the way into the upper torsos of the guy with the ball and the tackler, you would have had a real winner...