A really good idea here, but I feel the execution lets it down a bit. I note you have exposed the image for the surrounds, and presume you had a long exposure that allowed you to move positions. The negative that always comes with that method is the ghosting that occurs, and here the bright (and busy) background showing through does effect the overall result.
The use of flash in these cases (flash, change position, flash again) usually gives better results, as does being on a dark background so that there is less effect on your image.
But a great try at it.
Also, I am sure others have noticed, the image is tilted......... |