I've decided to comment on every shot in this challenge, since I'm sitting at 1 comments, and I'd rather try and take a positive approach to this rather than simply whining about my score:
Edgy, moody, and I like the connection to the viewer we're being given here. Very nicely lit and photographed.
Great all around, nice lighting, great details, attractive model, and professionally done. I just dont like what seems to be an angry expression from your model.