State War Memorial, Kings Park, Perth WA.
To all those who have given their lives in war;
They shall grow not old, as we that are left grow old:
Age shall not weary them, nor the years condemn.
At the going down of the sun and in the morning
We will remember them.
- Ode to Rememberance
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You seem to have 2 subject here, the penacle and the eternal flame. The flame being in front appears to be your choice of subjects. But the people take your eyes to the penacle. I find myself going from one to the other, back and forth. I get the sense of a struggle for top dog in the photo. Maybe someone else feels this way too and can explain it better. Don't get me wrong it's a good photo otherwise. Maybe taken from another angle, one which eliminates the people. Just my thoughts PTL5
could you maybe have crept up to the fencing and taken the picture without its bars blocking the words? so that the rectangle started with the L in LET and ended with the G in OFFERING, you know? heck i bet you paced it out and lined it up just so, should trust your judgement, could no more have uprooted the bars than you could've moved the clouds away for a sunnier landscape. then again overcast might be where it's at for this contemplative picture. seven.
One step to the left would have made this a whole point better for me. I think a polarizer would have helped to. While I'm sure the kids were out of your control, catching them in a more reverent moment would have improved the mood. 6 nards656
Composition ~ It may be an illusion, but the horizon seems slanted to the right a bit. Also the railing is distracting (both the front rail blocking the words and the back rail cutting the people). I know this will sound off the wall, but if you could have raised your camera 1 meter (about 3 feet) higher in the air and aimed down, this would have gone from a very nice snapshot to a powerful image (in my opinion). Possibly as little as holding your camera an arms length above your head and shotting. It takes a bit of practice to frame the shot that way, but it can really be worth it. I love the school children 'touring' in the background... You caught them at a perfect moment... ~ Exposure ~ I like the light overcast days produce and this shot took full advantage of it. Well done... ~ Focus ~ Well done... ~ Challenge ~ I have no problem imagining this in a publication... Well done! ~ Myqyl ~
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