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You placed nicely with this shot, well done.
I think this would have been a stronger shot if you had managed to light the swirling smoke here. Right now the lighting is fairly flat on your matches and there are not many details shining through for me. You have the golden opportunity here to make this really stand out, you have the flat, straight stitches and then the smooth buttery curves of the smoke. Your end matches are lost in the blackness of the background. A little shadow highlight may have brought out a little more interesting detail in the actual wood too.
You haven't made a comment in 4 months, very nice.
Originally posted by essay:
"I like the composition and the minimalistic image you have presented here, but the subject matter suffers from commonality here on DPC. There are a lot of dandelions MATCHES & SMOKE on DPC. In fact, I think I've even seen a few with the same type of blown SWIRLING SMOKE technique. Something seems off to me with the lighting. The highlights seem a little too harsh AS I CANNOT REALLY SEE MUCH OF THE DETAILED GRAINS IN THE WOOD AS I WOULD LIKE, AND THE SMOKE CLOUD ON THE RIGHT IS NOT PARTICULARLY APPEALING." ;)
Sound vaguely familiar? They say "our sins look especially bad when we see them in someone else."
-Seriously, I do like your composition, and congrats on the nice finish. Thanks for taking the time to comment on my entry (thumbnail below), but please realize, there are few original ideas each week on DPC (and I do put THE TWO OF US at the top of the list that are NOT particularly original).
When I do mimic something, I TRY to make some element(s) of it unique or at least execute it better than has been done before, as I'd like to think I have done in my entry this week, and as you have in yours.
I'm sure I could point to numerous similar examples of each photo of page one that have been entered before.
Yes, far more appropriate to the challenge than mine was, that's for sure! On my somewhat darkish monitor, I can't see the two lowest match heads, but apparently that didn't really affect many viewers.
"I like the composition and the minimalistic image you have presented here, but the subject matter suffers from commonality here on DPC. There are a lot of dandelions MATCHES & SMOKE on DPC. In fact, I think I've even seen a few with the same type of blown SWIRLING SMOKE technique. Something seems off to me with the lighting. The highlights seem a little too harsh AS I CANNOT REALLY SEE MUCH OF THE DETAILED GRAINS IN THE WOOD AS I WOULD LIKE, AND THE SMOKE CLOUD ON THE RIGHT IS NOT PARTICULARLY APPEALING." ;)
Sound vaguely familiar? They say "our sins look especially bad when we see them in someone else."
-Seriously, I do like your composition, and congrats on the nice finish. Thanks for taking the time to comment on my entry (thumbnail below), but please realize, there are few original ideas each week on DPC (and I do put THE TWO OF US at the top of the list that are NOT particularly original).
When I do mimic something, I TRY to make some element(s) of it unique or at least execute it better than has been done before, as I'd like to think I have done in my entry this week, and as you have in yours.
I'm sure I could point to numerous similar examples of each photo of page one that have been entered before.
My pick for Red - 9
This is beautifully executed.. keeping the matchstick on the left bottom with the negative space filled with smoke, it all works so well together!
![[ S MO K E D ]](https://images.dpchallenge.com/images_challenge/1000-1999/1093/1200/Copyrighted_Image_Reuse_Prohibited_821391.jpg)
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