not quite sure what the blurry lines are... view from inside a helmet perhaps? What if the inside of the helmet were in focus, and the background out of focus? I think that would make for a better picture. Interesting concept though.
Interesting composition! It's not clear what the 'grid' effect is - I suspect that we are supposed to feel like we are looking through the helmet at the outlined play. The grid and padding at the bottom of picture. Somehow, this picture feels a bit solitary, though...