A good effort which could have benefitted from a stylist. I like the over-the-shoulder position, and the lighting on her profile. But the eye is drawn instead to the long lines of her legs, which are in an unflattering position.
I think you could have gotten so much more out of this. You have a perfectly dressed model for daring glamour photos, and you enter with this? Shame on you ;)
I really like this shot because of the implied sexiness without really showing anything. Also, I love the composition and the out of focus shine of her high heels. 9