This is a riot - love it! Your POV is great, too. Very creative.
Based on your own comment down there - if I may suggest - I think some selective lightening of the guy in the back would have helped. Your background is brighter than your subjects and that could have affected the score.
For inside shots like that, I use this very fast Canon EF 50mm f/1.8 II - best (small) investment ever. I'm also not fond of flash and avoid it like the plague.
I realize I'm biased, but I think this is a freaking hilarious photo - especially when combined with the title! I also think it's well-composed. I couldn't do anything about the other people in the shot and realize they constitute a distraction for some. Also, the shot is very noisy because of the low light. I used ISO 6,400 and no flash - I don't like flashes. Other than the noise and the other people in the background, this is one of my favorite shots.