Interesting idea for this challenge! There's a good start at building tension in the viewer with the threat of the inevitable--wonder how far you could have pushed the pencil in to create just a bit more.... Nice depth of field and use of light and color. Overall, not bad.
Great Idea - works for me. Too many cliched punk ideas out there. Don't worry, I am one of them as well. Just joined the challenge, so eager for a fight.