Light is great, love the high-key here. Focus - perfect. Shallow depth works well. However, that reflection/the shape of it/the eyes, is unnerving. I can see how you could have gotten that with two rectangular softboxes, - really, it doesn't matter how, it is weird. I'd have taken another one, or played down the vertical line in the eyes. But that's just me. Great photo, nevertheless.
Love her eyes. Very sharp picture. I wouldn't have used so much light though. But if you were looking for a very bright white picture then you got it :D