Challenge:Rusted (Basic Editing I) Camera:Olympus C-4000Z Location: Park in Burnett, WI Date: May 3, 2004 Aperture: f3.5 ISO: 100 Shutter: 1/30 Galleries:Family, Action Date Uploaded: May 4, 2004
The motion in the little girl is what catches my eye first. Compositionally she is in the right place with respect to her motion, however the background beyond the central tree is distracting. Cropping this image at about the fifth rung of the slide's ladder but keeping the width would probably give it more impact and would isolate the subject better.
It looks like it was a grey day giving flat light. The image also seems slightly under exposed.
Thank you all for the comments. I see from the comments I may have fared better entering the blurry pics of her spinning on the merry go round. Or the dark closeup of her on top of the slide. I am learning a great deal. Thanks again.
Natalie is certainly a well adjusted child to put up with this degree of rust in her playground. I wish that car was out of the picture. A little cloning can easily remove it. I like the motion blur on Natalie and the focus throughout. A little brightening of the image would not hurt if the contrast can be maintained. Nice colors and wonderful composition and framing.
Composition: Subject Placement, Cropping, Background 7
Technical: Focus, Exposure, Lighting, Processing 5
Appeal: Is it Interesting, Motivating, Etc.? 6
How well does it meet the challenge: 6
Total Averaged Rating 6.00 Dick
Composition: Subject Placement, Cropping, Background 6
Technical: Focus, Exposure, Lighting, Processing 4
Appeal: Is it Interesting, Motivating, Etc. 5
How well does it meet the challenge: 6
Total Averaged Rating(Rounded) 5
Slightly OOF. Look like it was cropped in really close. Sky is overexposed at top. Cropping it out all together may have been wise.
Comes across as a snapshot. Use creative angles, put Natalie at the top of the slide and take a photo from the bottom looking up at a steep angle (making sure to get some rust textures in the picture). Or, take the same photo but have Natalie spinning on the wheel and capture a motion shot.
Without the title, I wouldn't make a connection with rust. Something closer up on the merry-go-round (I assume that's what's rusty), to make the rust more a part of the composition, would have worked better.
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