I admire the ingenuity that you put into this and think you are
on the right track. (but)
If it was mine, I'd probably try to integrate
the cute b/g objects into the composition more. And make the twirly things
in the flower more a part of the overall picture. right now (forgive me) I
think you have a lot of very pretty parts of the puzzle that don't quite
come together yet. Please keep playing with this very clever idea...
(Or not... as I say, it's just my opinion) |