I'm on thin ice here, but I would say that this has too much of a snapshot to really work as a portrait. Technically it is quite good (apart from the background), but I would have wanted eye contact with the model. Given that, this could have been really good.
A portrait without eye contact would only work, I think, if it was part of the story told. A picture of someone following some action that I am not aware of or "part of" ends up a snapshot. (I've got a whole bunch of them myself, and none of them is any good...) |