nice pose & lighting. Only thing that catches my eye are the levels (black does not seem quite black & white does not seem quite white). Adjusting this might make it "pop" more
I wonder how this would look with a colored background or even a patterned one. I'm thinking something out of the ordinary like fushia or lime green. Perhaps some abstract musical references...I'm not sure if that is even possible. The facial intensity in both models is fabulous, but the overwhelming lack of color brings my eyes to the only areas of color...the blue suspenders and the red in the hair. I had to really work hard at seeing the faces.