I like the way the high key lighting mixes with the intense eyes to really hook the viewer. The intensity in the eyes is just very well done. I am sure you will get lots of comments about the hair being in the eye. For some that will be a welcome thing, and for some it will be a detractor. For me it takes away from the eye, but not enough to mess up a good shot. The only other area that I want to briefly touch on is the bottom right which looks to have some fairly serious JPG artifacts going on. Specifically it looks pretty noisy. My best guess is this is just a bi-product of the post processing. Basic editing and full adjustments rather than selective will sometimes do that. I love the idea and creativity and thank you for entering a very nice shot!