I like that you submited an original photograph. Improving the DOF, getting more in focus should help. Right now I think that only the nose is in focus, it would be better if the face was in focus.
Ah, the tip of a nose. Pushing the focus back to the eye-plane, which would also allow us to see more detail in the curve of stone on the cheek-bone areas, would make this more punchy i think: probably you could even kep the dof as shallow, letting the protrusion of the nose drift out of focus, and have quite a good shot - the placing os the nose in frame is so weak that I don't think it would register as a focus problem.