Several things about this photo doesnt work. The disembodied mouth doesnt look right. The yellow of the lollipop reflecting on the tounge looks sickly and I think its a bit too close and too much detail on the tounge!! Technically however its pretty good. Keep in mind this is just my amatuer opinion
interesting take - it is a very in your face, rather on your tongue, kind of image. The colors are a little extreme, but it really suits this one. I quite like the lips and teeth, but the yellow smudge on the tongue doesn't quite work for me...
Great idea and composition the only thing I am not sure about is the choice of colour for the lollipop. I'm not sure why but I'm just not keen on the yellow! Love the detail here though :o)