Very pretty girl, interesting make-up. Makes me wonder what it's about.
I'm learning that sharper eyes can really make the portrait. Her eyes here are nice, but not quite as sharp as the mouth. Given her expression, I don't thing you want a softer look on the lips, but I bet if you made the eyes pop just a little more this would be a really great photo.
I'm not too fond of the makeup on the forehead... looks like a case of domestic violence or a survivor of a hard car crash. Other than that, nice catchlight in the eyes.