I like it better with the lady on the right. Having her there, and slightly in motion, gives the shot a lot of life, in my opinion. The other version is nice, but a bit more sterile. And you have quite the knack for these candids! I love them! How are you doing your conversion? The results are excellent!
A wonderful diner scene. Wish the lady on the right was walking into the scene or wasn't there. Still good job with the post work and wonderful lighting.
Interesting shot, I really like these kind of candid shots and you've done it well. In a perfect world I think the lady on the R is distracting and a slight vignette or gradient may be help ful minimize her taking away from the main subject.