Post Processing:
Spot edit to remove a couple of moles on her forehead and cheek.
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Pasted Duplicate into original
Changed blending mode to screen
Add contrast
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I agree with the square crop suggestion below. If you crop out just to the right of the umbrella, it would bring her all important, eyes into the "thirds".
I'd love to see it with some clip-on LED flashlight or a strobe at very low-intensity, lighting the inside of the umbrella. This would add an interesting effect and bring her hair out from the similar dark colors of the umbrella. Just an idea.
Must've been a bright day for 1/4000th, 1/125 or 1/60th with a remote fill-flash from the top-right and bouced off a reflector on the left, may have helped. I like the Red-on-black and background is okay as long as the water horizon is level.
While I like this pose and your use of the umbrella in this photograph, the background does not work for me. I believe the blown out sky detracts from your image, or, at the very least, does not add anything to it. I believe this same pose set against a different backdrop may have worked much better. In general it is a good idea to pay careful attention to one's background. I find that backgrounds are ignored more frequently than anything else by photographers. Careful attention to them can improve a photograph dramatically.
The model's chest is also lit slightly more than her face, which tends to pull the viewer's eyes there. A fill flash or a little dodge work in post-processing may have helped to correct this.
This photograph has potential, though, and I encourage you to continue your model work. You have working with the models down cold -- just pay attention to what's behind them. I believe it will improve your work dramatically.
i like this, but i think it would be even better if you focused even more on your subject and cut out more of the surroundings (foreground and background)
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