the idea of the reflcation of the camera was to show that the camera is intruding the eyes in search of the soul. However, since most of the people has found it ditracting, probably it is so!!
Very nice photo. I entered in this challenge with a similar approach to the topic but a very different photo. your off center exposure and choice of b&w is interesting - I am not sure which I like better.
Don't understand your crop. Why did you crop through the right eye and also hack through the outside of the left eye lid. This doesn't feel right somehow.