This is nice, but the hair in her face is distracting. I would also add some fill flash or a reflector to bring out catchlights in her eyes, and up your contrast a little. 5
Nice detail. She seems so solemn and no gleam in her eye. :( Seems like this shot could use a slight boost in contrast. JMO. Good luck in the challenge.
Cropping half way between her cheek and the right hand side of this image would make this shot much more intense than it is IMO. Focus is a bit TOO soft on her face? 7