Wow - after reading through the comments I have to wonder if we're all looking at the same photograph. I see nothing at all wrong with the "focus" and am pretty sure I don't want it deeper or shallower or closer to the viewer (and I am usually one who is disconcerted by OOF foregrounds.) In other words, I thought this was a darn fine take on the challenge. I also think it would make a great cover for a book.
a lot going on. The focus is so shallow that it doesn't keep the viewer in the photo for long. You almost have to struggle with the photo to work out what is going on. (I suppose this could be a good or bad thing). Not sure what that big blob in the top left is either!
I really don't care for the dof on this. To me, the whole image has no apeal, and doesn't crave to be looked at deeper. Can't see it 'next'. Other than that, there is some potential for constrats and such.