God, they are both stunning! The lighting on this is amazing, a beautiful photo. Missed this during the challenge (too many photos). I'm sorry I did. :(
The light falling on the right-hand models face is softer and better - the left model seems to have most of her face in shadow. I like how the lighting makes their hair look soft.
Double portraits are difficult because there are two pairs of eyes vying for attention and I think that this is the case here,also the left eye of the model on the left is very dark and would have benefitted from some reflected light.I think that a potrait of the model on the right, on her own, would be much better.
can't really go wrong with one redhead, let alone two...the light is just a tad harsh on the girl on the left, nearly obscuring her left eye completely...otherwise, a strong shot
the girl on the left, for true split lighting should not have light spilling across her face (HER left side), and on the right face, it would have been better if you had true Rembrant lighting, not almost Rembrant lighting. A 5 for your effort though.