Cool shot, but a little too dark for me on the laptop. Also, I think the entire composition needs to be to the right, just a touch. To me, it feels like it is being pushed out the left side. karmat
Did you try putting a few layers of tissue over the flash to add some fill light? This would save the pix on the monitor screen and add some light to the car and laptop.
Cute idea. I would bet that you had to shoot this dark to make the LCD appear, but it makes for a bit of a hard pic to stare at, creates a dark, sad mood, to boot. Great focus, must be a Sony F707 or manual focus. I started you out as a 5, but I have talked myself up to a 7. Have a nice day! Swash