This would work better for me if the lines were better formed. Mostly it just looks like a crowd. It is only because of the admission sign that I say "oh these people must be standing in line."
Oh yeah, and it is too dark in the lower half of the picture. Or perhaps, more accurately, too contrasty.
I understand your idea, and it's an original take, but it's a pity the queues are so messy. If they were in neater lines, the theme of the shot might have come through stronger.