First Impression - the most important one: Way improved .. and previous comments acted on in the right way.
Subject: This definately meets the challenge ... and contains a serious jump in the scoring.
Composition: I think that the door lines down the thirds works well .. but also the way that the face is angled creates a leading line through the side of the pictura. The eyes are great ... in that they force you to remain in touch with the subject ... it ensures a second look.
Technical (Colour and light): This has shown a vast improvement .... you have lightened the scene incredibly well .. and that in itself is fantastic ... you have also sharpened but not overused that tool.
To grow its vote?: Well you have by heaps so far ... so not sure of the next step ... I think that maybe a slightly wider shot or more space above the eyes to have them working the horizontal thirds .. may work.
Summary: Great work .. good taking on board comments received. Well done keep it up.
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SherwinJames! You really listened to those suggestions! And before I even looked up the original this was a 9 in my book but seeing the improvement in the shot it's going to a 10! :) Very well done!
I'm not familiar with the original, but I do like this one! Good lighting, I like the composition. Fingernail seems a bit blown, maybe? Ever so slightly distracting but only if you manage to get away from those eyes.
I wanted to vote without seeing the originals first, I thought my vote would be more unbiased that way. So now I'm trying to back through and compare the ones that I can, just to see. I'd have to say this is great improvement and the first go around wasn't bad, much better tonal qualities this time. I even managed to get the voting right. Great job!
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