wow- looking at your portfolio, it looks like you really don't need the help- it's great! I gave you a seven because it really showed who she is, which is what environmental portrait is all about. If you had moved back and cropped the lighting would have been much better, but I'm sure you realize that. I still hink it's a good job.. :0)
The "hot spots" take from this photo. Try to remember the rule of thirds ect and see if it helps you. If you need some good links just drop me a note. I'll be happy to help you :)