The concept is there, but it is really obvious that it was staged and the dodging of the edges is a nice touch but a little distracting. If you could find a better way to incorporate the verse the picture would be more successful.
I'm not sure I like the border. The shot itself is nicely balanced with the swan and person in prayer. I'm not quite sure this is a holy place as much as a holy person. The colors are somewhat drab.
I think it would be a bit better if the subject wasn't totally in the corner of the image so that the border didn't go through the clothing. Also, the border doesn't really add much to the photo. Having said all that - the idea of the shot and the title are both quite good.