I think one thing that could have helped it alot is upping the contrast, it seems a little washed out, and a high contrast in the this image would be a very cool effect.
Secondly, this photo BEGS for a border. I would suggest just a plain black one. It just amplifies the effect that your demonstrating here, and is nice for the viewer to have a clear edge around the photo.
Sorry you get stuck with me for your first CC critique
Composition - Good eye. This is a very good subject (I'm not really sold on it for this challenge in particular, but generally speaking I really like it). I like the asymmetry of it. GIves it some character. I like the symmetrical approach you've taken though. That really is cool. Good choice of tones for this photo as well
Technical - Just a bit unsharp (fuzzy or blurry are too harsh). How about soft? After I'd been submitting for 4 or 5 months, someone told me to sharpen once after resizing for every picture, unless it was meant to be soft. I don't like this one soft, I think the detail is too important to this picture to be ignored with soft focus. I may be way off too, but that's my opinion.
Overall - Interesting. Not ribbon winning interesting, but definitely better than average. Its hard for me to say too much here, because I'm probably talking to someone with 5x the experience I have if not way more. Not every "beginner" starts his digital photography career with an s2 pro, which is the camera I'm one day aspiring to own. But will probably be outdated by the time I'm photographer enough to handle one. Its a very good shot and I think you made a good showing for your first picture. I think it would've been a very good showing for my 42nd picture if you must know :) Welcome to the site. I'm sure you'll do well here. - Bob
The soft focus in this works well for the mood - especially coupled with black-and-white. The symmetry (or near-symmetry) helps hold this together, keeping my eyes from leaving the frame even when the lines of the staircase might otherwise result in exactly that.
I think that using the rule of thirds would help your photo here. Maybe by moving the pipe in the middle to either left or right would lead my eyes through the photo. As it is now my eyes are stuck to the center of the photo.
i like this picture because of it's initial appearance of being random, but then at a closer look it's not random at all. i also like the wall cutting the two sides in half right down the middle.
I have the insane urge to rotate this photo 90 degrees counter clock. I know it wouldn't work, but I want to anyways. Interesting interplay. I think there is a number of good shots you can get from this staircase in the future.
Composition: Interesting choice to put the brickwork slightly off-centre and off a third, but it doesn't detract at all. I may have cropped a little tigher on the top edge, as the darkness top-right draws my eye.
Technical: Contrast is nice, but I would have tried a little sharpening to improve clarity.
Meets challenge: Yes
Overall impression: I love this style of photo but that small lack of clarity lets it down.
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