Your lack of photographers comments make it difficult to see if you achieved your goals with this shot. Let's see what we can come up with anyways...
Very pretty model! I like your overall composition and the choice of tonality for the duotone challenge but there are several things that you could do to improve this shot.
I am normally a big fan of soft focus shots. This shot however doesn't look soft focus it looks slightly out of focus. This is something that will get you seriously scored down in this forum called DPC.
Your models pose is very nice but the way the blanket lays around her takes away from the pose. The big bunch of blanket that is so dark in front of her pulls the eye away from her with her dark top. The dark part of the blanket to the right of the frame does the same.
I like how you included the teddy bear in the shot. The tag on it's ear really bothers me though. It looks like an oversight. This is also something that voters don't like here.
You need a bit of fill lighting coming in from the left of the frame. This would not only help brighten up the shot a touch it would help to soften the shadow behind your model. I think a catch light in her eyes would also help to improve the shot by making your model look more 'alive' for lack of a better word.
The last thing that bothers me about the shot is the placement of model and camera with the shape of the room and the bed. If you moved the model a bit to the left and/or the camera a bit to the right, you would hide the bed post behind her. This is an unneeded element in the shot. Hiding/removing it would make for a much simpler and more powerful composition.
I know that I have pointed out a lot of negative things about this shot. This doesn't mean I don't like the shot rather they are things that could take a shot that has much potential and move it up much higher in the rankings...
TC
to me this looks like a snapshot lacking interest, turned sepia; the background and setting are akward and there is an unpleasant shadow to the left; the girl's expression doesn't say anything, the picture doesn't say anything; try harder and better luck next time!
The line cutting her head from her shoulders is unfortunate, but otherwise this is a nice picture. You've captured a nice moment that reveals a bit about Naomi's personality here.
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