This just doesn't work for me - I think it maybe one of those shots that some love and others hate. I won't go as far as saying I hate it, but I don't like it much either, sorry.
I'm kind of intrigued by some of the compositional decisions you've made here. Your cropping particularly - though this has the feel of a full frame. It doesn't really do much for me. The high-key work brings it so close to almost pure graphics that I don't see the interest.