I like this.... good placement of cart and word "mobile"... even if head was included, the head photos in picture window may be too distracting to viewer unless you blurred the head images in a rendering application.
Good job!!
I'm wondering if a better "compromise" to the anonymity problem would be to crop the guy out entirely. Most DPC members have a stereotypical image of a homeless person they can use to mentally fill in the scene. It would save the awkwardness of cutting off his head, and, as you said, the subject is his home.
If you crop just at the rightmost corner of the big red bucket, you'll just have a bit of his sleeve and his right shoe in the image. It might also help compensate for the blur, by making it look like (if it isn't) a motion blur of the cart entering the frame from the right.
It's a great capture, worth continuing to work with.
*Critique Club*
The first thing that I noticed about this was that you cropped off his head. This to me showed a lot of respect and I appreciate the decision to do so. However, I do think that the shot itself would have been better if the head of the man were in the shot. We make tough decisions, and although it hurts the image, I think your decision was the best one that could be made regarding this.
The second thing I noticed was the focus. While the word "Mobile" is in good focus, the man and the cart are not. I think that had they been in focus a bit better, this would have been a very striking image.
It's good as it is, but the focus would have definately had some major impact.
The angle and framing/cropping is very important (disregarding the missing head, which I've already discussed). I think that you cropped this well to get the word mobile in there, and this is excellent. I also think that the crop to the right is good. Enough to get the man in the shot, and I dont think it needs any extra room over there.
You have put the man and cart to the right, and the words to the left, which I think balances out this photo nicely.
Great capture. once in a lifetime.
~Heather~
Thanks for the comments, I cropped out his face because I wanted to maintain his anonymity and because the photo is of his home, not the person. Getting the word mobile in the background was pure luck, I was driving through downtown when I saw him and grabbed my camera to quickly take the picture, only when I checked it at home did I see my good fortune.
Pricks your conscience and shows the persistence of human survival instinct. A good contextual shot with the oppulent promo material showing maximum contrast to the subject.
very cool that the word "mobile" is also on the glass. Often these shots are thought of as exploitation, but homelessness is a reality none of us should ignore. Thank you for showing us this. There is an anonymity of this man with his head cut out of the shot.
I love your crop on this shot. I think it leaves the "who is this" thought in the mind of the viewer. It could be any one we know. I rarely show the faces of the homeless in my work. Im sure you will get a few negative comments for this crop, but I think it adds volumes to this shot. - Good Luck - 8
Probably the best comment of the week - and I appreciate your having preserved your subject's anonymity....I got a bit distracted by the trolley's rear right wheel as it's lit up so and I spent some time trying to find "the Alsatian's OTHER legs"....
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