I wish the rose was pulled down a little bit more so that all of "In loving memory of" was all the way visible. A little bit softer lighting would have been nice too to make the pages of the bible similar on the left and right side.
I am sorry for your loss. I recently have lost 4 friends in one month and found out another friend had a stroke yesterday. Again, deepest sympathy for you and your family.
I like the original idea here, but I think the shot is off a bit technically. The lighting is quite strong on the top and very dim on the bottom. A more even light would make for a cleaner image. Also the pressed flower is adding to the flat feeling here, a fresh flower would have given some dimension.