A bit too cloying. Faces look "flat" in that lighting - something a little more dynamic required, maybe. Might have looked more interesting had they not been so obviously lying down - how about balanced on chairsa couple of feet off the ground, heads together, hair falling backwards (rtather than bunched) with flowers blurred in the background?
You really can't connect with a photo that you are looking a a face sideways. I would have flipped in to horizontal, and changed it to sepia. Great try though.