I suppose the depth of field or the position of the focus plane should have been slightly different, so that the line itself is at least partially in focus. Otherwise it's a very nice self (?, looks like your picture on the author's page) portrait. Grain and blur all work, i agree that you can almost see the thoughts. Pretty good lighting, maybe only somewhat questionable composition. I would probably move the camera slightly south-east. I was one of the five sevens you got.
Youve captured very nicely the lines and bumps on this man face. I can almost see the thoughts writihing around in his head. The way the blur was use reminds me of a winter in 97. (7)