It's probably from the steam, but his right eye (on the left in the portrait) is really low contrast.
Otherwise this is a rather nice shot... (By the way, where the hell did you get that suit-jacket? The thing is either size 70 or the model is a very small person. (and it looks a bit like BOTH are true here!))
Such a stern look on such a young face, but then, it is channeling some of that 'what may care' expression from the original. Lighting is good and showcases a lot of details, but need to watch that it is not too overpowering. On both the PC and laptop monitors, the left side of his face is a bit blown out and the right side of the white coffee cup has blown highlights. I do have another suggestion that the original makes good use of that could be utilized to great effect in this redux. Zoom or crop closer to the main subject. Bring your audience closer to the subject - give and up close and personal 'conversation' with this gent. I feel this has more a stand-offish feel where the original had more closeness of familiarity to it. Unless....stand-offish is what you were going for but not quite sure.
Good job! Technically, I think this would have worked better if the camera were level rather than slightly below eye level. And the highlights are a bit blown on the camera left side of the face, and camera right side of the cubp
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