How far were you from the camera? Seems a bit close. The lighting is a bit harsh on the right side. I can't tell if you are trying low key or high key here. If you were trying low key then block some of the light or try to bounce it. If you were trying to get a high key protrait, it usually needs to be bright on all areas besides the eyes hair and such and the back ground should be as white as the subject.
Keep shooting, nice try. :-)
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