Bear_Music pointed out some potential rhythm troubles with lines 26 and 39. 39 should probably start "Young Arnit". As to line 26, hmm... I'm not sure about this, but if it feels comfortable to say "far Marathon" instead of just "Marathon," then say it. Anyone else whose line doesn't feel right can contact me.
Wow, effing SWEET! Hving said that, I think elsapo or Joey Lawrence sould be metioned in there somewhere :)
many were neglected. I was trying to stay faithful to the length and structure of the original poem, and tell some kind of story, so it limited my ability to list people (and yes that d@mn Achoo got mentioned twice, that presumptuous b******d...)
Bear_Music pointed out some potential rhythm troubles with lines 26 and 39. 39 should probably start "Young Arnit". As to line 26, hmm... I'm not sure about this, but if it feels comfortable to say "far Marathon" instead of just "Marathon," then say it. Anyone else whose line doesn't feel right can contact me.
Line #2 sent. I couldn't find my computer mike, so I tried the right-channel earphone thing and it really works, and I think it actually sounds better than those cheap little computer mikes too!
